i adore this, it's really well written, and i love the amount of character customisation u can do, especially the diverse amount of pronouns u can choose from!!! im really looking forward to coming updates of this! <33
I quite like this story! There's some things about that the MC can have some legal issues since before meeting that Roman, but is acting all innocent (???) OKAY- Maybe it doesn't make sense, but let's just say that I like the story! And well, the rewrite is in progress, soo!~ Looking forward it!!
it'd be nice if there was an option to exhibit more of a all-cops-are-bastards attitude, especially when meeting the detective one-on-one
like, i'd very much remind him (during the call and/or in person) that i asked for a lawyer and there's none present. i know declining the offer to meet doesn't fit the plot but i'd like to at least be difficult and unwilling haha
There is a rewrite happening for this WIP. While the meeting is necessary, I will try to include some more ACAB choices for fellow likeminded people and your mcs.
Really enjoying this so far! Roman is so intriguing early on... One small pronoun issue I noticed - I have both my character's and Roman's pronouns set to they/them, but get this line in their first meeting in the cafe:
They start to count their change and Roman's gaze settles on you again. "Hold onto it for her order," They say.
Hey, so there are a bunch of instances early on right after your first encounter that specifically refer to the imposing stranger as a man, even though I chose female pronouns.
"To them, the man's send-off was genial. Familiar, even."
"You don't know if you want to turn around and confront the man so nonchalantly intimidating, crawl into a hole, puke, or get home and forget about the night entirely."
"Oh, god, what if it's the man from last night? You glance at the takeout bag."
"Not that there is anyone in this city who would recognize your name or your face except for maybe your landlord. And the man who rescued you."
I only just started so I don't know how many there are, but maybe a CTRL-F through the script for "man" would be prudent, as I get the impression you have a rather firm picture of the character in your mind when writing.
EDIT: Well, that was neat! Definitely keeping my eye on this one.
That variable is affected by changing how Roman identifies, not their pronoun selection. Did you select "man" during this playthrough? Let me know if this helps!
I have never seen these people or this movement but choosing a decent name for the character is important. Roman is a guys name, kinda like John or David. At least choose a gender neutral name like Alex
Well just because you have never seen it doesn't mean it doesn't exist lol. And i don't see the big issue anyways. There are already quite a few people with certain names regardless their gender so you just kinda have to deal with it ^^
Non binary nonsense? Have you checked the tag, it literally says lgbt bruh aka lgbtq+ even if you don't agree about lgbt = lgbtq+ enbies are still in the transgender umbrella.
It's not cool that you come to a lgbtq+ friendly game and are being transphobic specifically against enbies. Have some respect and keep rude comments to yourself they are going through enough irl so we don't need people like you invade safe spaces for them. And if you are one of those "it's free speech" people then keep in mind that being a bigot is HATE speech and something else than free speech.
I'm not sure if it's just me but when I get to the page directly after almost getting hit by the car or choosing Romans' height it doesn't let me go any further, I tried waiting to see if anything would show up but nothing has happened. Does anyone know how to fix it? Thank you :
HI i know its been a month and you probably dont care anymore but just in case, i also had the same issue but then i made page smaller and it showed up💀
I'm wondering why a MC with a criminal background, acts dumb and innocent with Roman? Also when did they decide they wanted to talk to the detective? Seemed to just pop up there regardless of how cooperative had been before. Also any chance MC will get to do something more involved, or is it the intention that they 'have to' be an 'unwilling' participant?
Maybe just me though. I do tend to like playing non-innocent characters myself. Although difficult to find good stories can play them.
happened to me too, try decreasing your zoom on your browser. If you're using Chrome it should appear justr below "Extensions" and just above "Print..." when you click the three dots near the star that you use to book mark a page
I have no issue with smooching a villain, but if Roman thinks they’re not gonna catch these hands for threatening me, kidnapping me, and making me an accomplice they’ve got another thing coming. I am 4’8 and I WILL kick their shadowy behind.
Oh my, the demo is quick and short, but it hooked me completely, the feelings of the mc could be felt as if I was really there, Thanks for making this, and yes, I would actually fall for a sinner, I can't wait for more.
this demo is very interesting! this is quite different from stories i have read before and the way that the writer got me begging for more is crazy. the way that we only see the character roman for a short time and we can immediately have a gist of his character and attitude.
This was quite interesting! I really liked how "Roman"" (assuming if it's their real name) is written so well, they're quite threatening, intimidating, and mysterious. Granted, that's all we can see in the demo but so far Roman is quite an interesting lil character (I do wonder if Roman is the villain... Who would play as the hero? Because I know our MC won't take that role at all). I also like how MC reacts to the situation in a slightly more realistic way, showing hostility, silence, and deflecting the tenseness with sharp sarcasm. I think they all work well to incorporate how, even though Roman is our love interest, so far nothing about their interactions are all happy-go-lucky. It makes me think we're gonna have an enemies to lovers moment with Roman and the corruption arc of our lil MC. Looking forward to further development of it!
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this is so good can’t wait till u update again!
oooooommmmmggggggg this is so amazing! I need to fuck grey like yesterday. this is top tier
this is amazing.wonderful.marvelous.awesome.incredible.fabulous.astounding. gonna play it AGAIN.
Is this IF dead?
This IF is being rewritten and reworked!
i adore this, it's really well written, and i love the amount of character customisation u can do, especially the diverse amount of pronouns u can choose from!!! im really looking forward to coming updates of this! <33
for some reason i can't get past the "Get home" part, is that how it's supposed to be?
why this was just a demooo- Aaanyways!
I quite like this story! There's some things about that the MC can have some legal issues since before meeting that Roman, but is acting all innocent (???) OKAY- Maybe it doesn't make sense, but let's just say that I like the story! And well, the rewrite is in progress, soo!~ Looking forward it!!
it'd be nice if there was an option to exhibit more of a all-cops-are-bastards attitude, especially when meeting the detective one-on-one
like, i'd very much remind him (during the call and/or in person) that i asked for a lawyer and there's none present. i know declining the offer to meet doesn't fit the plot but i'd like to at least be difficult and unwilling haha
There is a rewrite happening for this WIP. While the meeting is necessary, I will try to include some more ACAB choices for fellow likeminded people and your mcs.
Thanks for reading!
woo! i'm happy to hear that, thank you :D
good luck with the rewrite! i enjoyed this version of the demo and am very excited to see what you do with it ✨️
Can't wait to double-cross this person. I swear they trying to frame me and i aint lettin that slide. Probs gonna be rude the entire time
Really enjoying this so far! Roman is so intriguing early on...
One small pronoun issue I noticed - I have both my character's and Roman's pronouns set to they/them, but get this line in their first meeting in the cafe:
i need moreee
Hey, so there are a bunch of instances early on right after your first encounter that specifically refer to the imposing stranger as a man, even though I chose female pronouns.
"To them, the man's send-off was genial. Familiar, even."
"You don't know if you want to turn around and confront the man so nonchalantly intimidating, crawl into a hole, puke, or get home and forget about the night entirely."
"Oh, god, what if it's the man from last night? You glance at the takeout bag."
"Not that there is anyone in this city who would recognize your name or your face except for maybe your landlord. And the man who rescued you."
I only just started so I don't know how many there are, but maybe a CTRL-F through the script for "man" would be prudent, as I get the impression you have a rather firm picture of the character in your mind when writing.
EDIT: Well, that was neat! Definitely keeping my eye on this one.
That variable is affected by changing how Roman identifies, not their pronoun selection. Did you select "man" during this playthrough? Let me know if this helps!
Ohh, I see! I completely missed that button, maybe it should have a line break after the colon to format it the same way as the pronouns?
Pretty good, I think there should be more ROs. Also having a female RO named Roman is strange, the name should be changed to match the gender.
Well more and more people support the idea that names doesn't have a gender ^^
I have never seen these people or this movement but choosing a decent name for the character is important. Roman is a guys name, kinda like John or David. At least choose a gender neutral name like Alex
Well just because you have never seen it doesn't mean it doesn't exist lol. And i don't see the big issue anyways. There are already quite a few people with certain names regardless their gender so you just kinda have to deal with it ^^
I disagree. I certainly wouldn't call a girl Roman. Bad enough writers keep adding non binary nonsense and they/them LIs.
Non binary nonsense? Have you checked the tag, it literally says lgbt bruh aka lgbtq+ even if you don't agree about lgbt = lgbtq+ enbies are still in the transgender umbrella.
It's not cool that you come to a lgbtq+ friendly game and are being transphobic specifically against enbies. Have some respect and keep rude comments to yourself they are going through enough irl so we don't need people like you invade safe spaces for them. And if you are one of those "it's free speech" people then keep in mind that being a bigot is HATE speech and something else than free speech.
Lol had to comment twice on an 8 months old comment, you sure don't care
Feel free to not play the game then. If something as simple as a name is such a big stumbling block for you, perhaps the name isn't the actual issue.
not you saying that with that username💀
I'm not sure if it's just me but when I get to the page directly after almost getting hit by the car or choosing Romans' height it doesn't let me go any further, I tried waiting to see if anything would show up but nothing has happened. Does anyone know how to fix it? Thank you :
HI i know its been a month and you probably dont care anymore but just in case, i also had the same issue but then i made page smaller and it showed up💀
I DO CARE, thank you sosososososoosososososooso much I actually tired it again yesterday so THANK YOU!!
HAHAHAHASFASHL YOURE WELCOME
damn
I'm wondering why a MC with a criminal background, acts dumb and innocent with Roman? Also when did they decide they wanted to talk to the detective? Seemed to just pop up there regardless of how cooperative had been before. Also any chance MC will get to do something more involved, or is it the intention that they 'have to' be an 'unwilling' participant?
Maybe just me though. I do tend to like playing non-innocent characters myself. Although difficult to find good stories can play them.
This is so good. Im actually so excited for the next chapter I cant wait :p
Very cute!
I'm really loving the game so far, but damn, I freaking hate Roman. I just hope we'll be able to kick their ass in the future... 😤😤
I love the demo, but even though I chose to be a woman the characters keep referring to me as him...
Pronouns are selected at the beginning of the demo, a separate choice from the gender options later on. Thanks for reading!
Mein Gott, Roman, you are gonna get my heart, in both meanings of the word. I love it, Thank you for this~
I’m in love. Romancing a (hot) villain is so interesting and I love to make my MC a kinda frightened, sarcastic mess. I’m intrigued ❤️
Is it me or is the bottom part partially covered by the Menu thing? It makes it hard to read some choices.
happened to me too, try decreasing your zoom on your browser. If you're using Chrome it should appear justr below "Extensions" and just above "Print..." when you click the three dots near the star that you use to book mark a page
this hooked me in completely! I was really charmed by Roman hehehe
Can’t wait for more!
I have no issue with smooching a villain, but if Roman thinks they’re not gonna catch these hands for threatening me, kidnapping me, and making me an accomplice they’ve got another thing coming. I am 4’8 and I WILL kick their shadowy behind.
omg im the Better Call Saul
Hah, yes.
Everytime i play this i wait eagerly for the next update . Wont lie this got me hooked
Oh my, the demo is quick and short, but it hooked me completely, the feelings of the mc could be felt as if I was really there, Thanks for making this, and yes, I would actually fall for a sinner, I can't wait for more.
this demo is very interesting! this is quite different from stories i have read before and the way that the writer got me begging for more is crazy. the way that we only see the character roman for a short time and we can immediately have a gist of his character and attitude.
This was quite interesting! I really liked how "Roman"" (assuming if it's their real name) is written so well, they're quite threatening, intimidating, and mysterious. Granted, that's all we can see in the demo but so far Roman is quite an interesting lil character (I do wonder if Roman is the villain... Who would play as the hero? Because I know our MC won't take that role at all). I also like how MC reacts to the situation in a slightly more realistic way, showing hostility, silence, and deflecting the tenseness with sharp sarcasm. I think they all work well to incorporate how, even though Roman is our love interest, so far nothing about their interactions are all happy-go-lucky. It makes me think we're gonna have an enemies to lovers moment with Roman and the corruption arc of our lil MC. Looking forward to further development of it!
Well done! I was swept away so fast; I need to know where this is going! Awesome touch with the playlist too.
this was so cool! its amazing how you write roman to be so charming yet terrifying. i can't wait for the next update
Loving it so far, cant wait for more!
This concept intrigues me! I look forward to any updates in the future :)!
Omfggg when IS THEEE NEXT UPDATE DID THE AUTHOR JUST DIP???
Not at all! Author has just had a crazy year :)
An update release is planned for later this month.
I can't seem to scroll down. I keep having to zoom out the entire page, sometimes to the point that I can't read anymore.
If you're in a smartphone put the browser in desktop mode and play with the phone in the vertical, and if text is to small go to settings and put it in 150%
I'm on a laptop. maybe it's an issue with my browse
i have the same issue
The only thing bad about this is that it isn't finished, lol.
I look forward to when you're able to update! I adore your writing style. :)